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Some people believe that math success depends on good teacher; others think that it depends on student’s talent. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

#people #math #success #teacher #student’s #talent
A subject like math is hard but can be made easy by a
teacher
as well as
 a student. It depends on
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teacher
 and
a
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 students. From the viewpoint of a school ,
atleast
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at least
a
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 institution should have excellent
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faculty. My viewpoint is described below.
Firstly
, if
a
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math success
is depends
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depends
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 on best
a
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the
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teacher
than
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then
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 a university which
have
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has
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best
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the best
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a
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apply
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staff
from
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 that
view point
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viewpoint
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 all
a
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children must be
best
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 in math.
For example
, If a school like
oxford
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 have better
staff
then
 compare to other
insititution
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institutions
institution
 but all depends on
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 students.
Secondly
, If
a
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staff
 is well and good but
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children
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 does not focus
then
teacher
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the teacher
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 will be useless.
For example
, in
town
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,town
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a
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the
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 school
staff
 are not highly educated but
a
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students from
small
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the small
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 area are becoming a CEO of a company like
a
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an
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amzon
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amazon
. In
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the study
a study
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study
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,study
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 a
student
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student's
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 talent
have
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has
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great
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a great
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 impact on marks. It is said that one book, one pen, and one
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teacher
 can develop a whole world. If a child is talented but needs a proper guide, if they will need proper
advisour
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advisor
adviser
than
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then
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 a child can do its best. If a
teacher
 is giving 100% but a child is weak
then
 it totally depends on a
Finally
,
According to
 me both
a
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teachers
as well as
 young people talent both have
a
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equal
importants
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importance
important
. It can not be said that if good
staff
 is there
than
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then
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 the student will learn easily. At least the organisation should give
it
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its
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 best to children.
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