Writing Task 2: You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is widely argued whether tourists from overseas should be charged more than native residents for visiting monuments. I completely agree with
this
idea for a variety of reasons
Firstly
, the higher price of a ticket for foreigners would be that inhabitants have already paid for the cultural and historical sites through the tax. This
means that foreign visitors have to pay more to make it even. In fact, this
statement ignores the fact that foreign guests compensate for the unfair payment by spending money on other items like souvenirs, hotels, and transportation tickets. For example
, they can spend their money on a wide range of goods and services, including food, souvenirs, accommodation and travel. Therefore
, governments and inhabitants of every country should be happy to subsidize important tourist sites and encourage people from the rest of the world to visit them.
Furthermore
, if travellers realized that they would have to pay less to visit historical and cultural attractions in a particular nation, they would perhaps decide to take advantage of global travel. This
means that some national tours will lose both capital and profits, leading to bankruptcy and fewer attraction
for new travellers. Fix the agreement mistake
attractions
For example
, some foreigners may try to get in through the local people's entrance by mistake or on purpose without suitable payments. This
will trigger traffic problems of theft events or even terrorism.
In conclusion, applying higher fees at cultural and historical attractions for tourists is required. In my opinion, I believe the government should make
their best to attract more foreign visitors and it may exert an adverse effect by setting higher prices for them than for local visitors.Verb problem
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coherence cohesion
The introduction presents a clear opinion and the main points are adequately supported. However, the essay lacks overall coherence and the ideas are not always logically connected. Make sure to structure the essay with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion, ensuring that the ideas flow smoothly from one to the next.
task achievement
The essay provides a complete response to the task with comprehensive ideas and specific examples, but there are areas where the ideas are not fully developed or relevant to the topic. Make sure to address each part of the question thoroughly and support your ideas with relevant, specific examples.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite