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Some people say that to prevent illness and disease government should focus more on reducing environmental pollution and housing problems. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

#people #illness #disease #government #focus #pollution
The provided maps illustrate what the countryside developed between 1937 and 1995. As can be seen from the two maps, there had built a lot of infrastructure, houses, and facilities. By 1937, there was a small
road
 across the
center
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 of
this
 map from east to west. To the south of the
road
, there were little houses, a lake, and a disused railway line in a
scrubland
.
Furthermore
, there were agricultural land and marshland to the
scrubland
's south.
Likewise
, to the north of the
road
, there was
scrubland
, woodland, and a minor house. In 1995, the small
road
 had been expanded.
Moreover
, near the
road
, the number of houses had increased, and a leisure complex, a hospital, and a car park had been constructed. The railway line
also
 had turned on using since 1991 by opening a railway station in 1990.
On the other hand
, the lake and agricultural land had been smaller since 1937.
Besides
, there had been replaced the marshland with a wildfowl sanctuary.
In addition
, a golf course had been built on the
scrubland
 to the north of the
road
.
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