in your opinion, what has been the most significant transportation innovation of the past 200 years?

The
transportation
system
can
be see
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now in different parts of the
world
. In my opinion, aeroplanes are the best inventions of the past 200 years.
Firstly
, over the years technology
grews
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grows
grew
as fast as a blink. So, everything is changing in a fast way that we can not imagine what is the next version of
transportation
.
Although
, when the wheel was built by
the
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innovative man, it completely
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the
world
and people on fire.They started to make a
system
like bicycles to move from one place to another.
Next,
they understood that they need more comfy and
also
they had to reach their
distination
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destination
faster than
befor
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before
. So, they invented
engins
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engines
engine
and after that cars appeared in the streets which consists
4
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wheels and
a
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engin
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engine
.
Moreover
, the population grew and the need was absolutely demanded
for
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cars and different kinds of
transportation
systems. The streets
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not prepared for that much amount of crowd so they started to make their imagination of humans flying, come true. They invented aeroplanes which can fly with
engin
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engines
, two wings and
also
wheels for
landing
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and takeoff process.
This
innovating
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idea has changed the
world
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transportation
systems. All
the
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people around the
world
like to start their vacation trip with
wonderful
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airplan
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aeroplane
and arrive
to
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their
distination
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destination
in the fastest way.
Although
, it has
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comfortable and ergonomic features
but
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it has the same bad happenings like
crashs
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crashes
crashing
crash
or falling because of a small mistake and give
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people's
lifes
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lives
life
because of these accidents. Airplanes
system
is much better than other
transportation
systems and
also
it has
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wise, innovative mind backstage. In conclusion, over the decades the
transportation
system
has developed but in my
opinion
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aeroplane was the best innovation of the past 200 years.
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