Some people think getting old is entirely bad. However, others think that life of the elderly in modern world is much easier than in the past. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Getting old is a natural process that nobody really likes. When you reach a certain age, your physical conditions will inevitably deteriorate, and you may suffer from various kinds of diseases. When you retire, you will feel isolated because your previous work contacts may be all gone,
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you may feel useless to the world.
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, when you get too old, you’ll have to rely heavily on
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support from others, either physically or emotionally, and your
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will become a great pressure
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your family and the whole society as well. For all these bad things about getting old, many
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argue that the
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of the elderly today is much easier than in the past. In the first place, medical advances nowadays have made it possible for
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old
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to stay sound and healthy for quite a long
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even after they retire. Diseases
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as diabetes, hypertension and heart attack which might have inflicted pain on the old
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are no longer serious problems for them.
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, with the widespread use of modern communication technology, old
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today are no longer isolated from the world.
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, by using their personal social media, they can always stay in touch with their families and friends, and share with them whatever they find interesting in their
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way, they do not really feel lonely or abandoned.
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, the improved social wealth and pension system have
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significantly reduced the pressure the old
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pose to their families and communities. So, I do agree that
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old
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today are enjoying a much more comfortable
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than, say, thirty years ago (
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why,
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of being worried about their retired
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, many
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even begin to expect their retirement to come, because they see
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as a new beginning of their
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. I think, as long as the old
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have the right attitude, the modern world has indeed much to offer for their happy, enjoyable and rewarding retired
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