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Topic 7: Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary schools rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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In the globalization era, having the ability to speak a foreign
language
 is a significant skill to integrate into the world. For that reason, lots of parents suggest that children should learn a new
language
 as soon as in primary school rather than in secondary school.
This
 brings both pros and cons. I think the benefits outweigh the drawbacks. On the one hand, teaching children at a young age has some negative impacts.
To begin
 with, it could affect the ability to learn their mother tongue properly. They might get confused by learning more than one
language
 at the same time,
consequently
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 they can’t speak their mother tongue frequently like their peers.
Moreover
, learning a foreign
language
 may increase stress because they have a heavy schedule at school and their minds are not perfected to learn a lot of things.
On the other hand
, learning a foreign
language
 when they are young
also
 has many positive impacts.
Firstly
, learning a new
language
 comes more naturally by trying to mimic what they hear
instead
 of by grammar.
This
 means they can pick up the pronunciation and intonation more easily when they learn them naturally.
Secondly
, learning a foreign
language
 at a young age is better for children’s future. They will benefit from knowing a foreign
language
 in their upcoming studies or careers as well.  In conclusion, it seems to me that the advantages of teaching children a foreign
language
 at an early age outweigh the disadvantages.

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