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Nowadays, more and more people decide to have children later in their life. What are the reasons? What are the effects of this on society and families?

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 world, more families tend to postpone having children. I believe that
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 trend roots in both economic and social reasons, and it will have repercussions for
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society in various aspects.
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 increasing trend has several reasons.
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, the children’s need vary from the most basic ones like nutrition, medical services or education to more complicated ones
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 as entertainment or physical well-being which requires a large amount of money,
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, young parents prefer to firm a stable financial status and
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 making decision to have kids.
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, young couples find their marriage really unstable in
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 years and try to accumulate more parenthood experience to create a healthier and more positive atmosphere for their future offspring.
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,
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 priorities have altered during
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 decades. People mostly try to pursue their
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 and occupation
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 their younger ages to be well-paid and professional in the future,
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 they have little time for creating
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 tendency, which is mostly common among young couples, brings about a plethora of consequences for society. Primarily, the more people tend to delay their parenthood, the more fertility issues they face. By reaching elder ages the possibility of giving birth to a healthy child, decreases significantly
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 in women.
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, the preference to create nuclear and medium-sized families would lead to the lack of young, professional and motivated population to occupy the job vacancies to meet the
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 market’s needs
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, the country’s economic and industrial state would face a crucial issue which requires serious measures to be taken by the government. In conclusion,
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 of social and economic reasons are engaged with
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 issue and
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 trend can lead to catastrophic
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 and medical situation for citizens.

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