Some people believe that a country becomes more interesting and develops faster when its population includes a mixture of different nationalities and cultures. To what extend do you agree and disagree?
If
is often Correct your spelling
It
argue
that Wrong verb form
argued
state
with Correct article usage
a state
people
from other countries
become
more attractive and develops Correct subject-verb agreement
becomes
more
faster. Change the word
apply
This
essay will completely agree with the statement. I believe that foreginers
help Correct your spelling
foreigners
countries
to develop various sectors and improve impressively.
Nation
become
more interesting when the foreign Change the verb form
becomes
culture
helps to increase attention
of local Add an article
the attention
people
. This
suggests that they could be a key point in developing various fields such
as entertainment throughout
Change preposition
through
culture
share from other countries
and affect nation
in a positive way. Add an article
the nation
One
of
Change preposition
apply
the
example is Correct article usage
apply
Korea
. In the past 100 years, Korea
merely considered its own culture
and tried to avoid other traditions from different continents. As time went by, many different culture
came to Change to a plural noun
cultures
Korea
and developed festivals like Halloween, which is one
of the most popular events in Korea
, by introducing these events to local people
. And These lead to industiral
improvements.
Correct your spelling
industrial
Furthermore
, a mixture of nationalities can also
improve specific
Correct article usage
a specific
nation
to be more prosperous in industry. In other words
, the increase of
immigration and the Change preposition
in
students
who study abroad cause a strong contribution Correct quantifier usage
number of students
in
that country. China, Change preposition
to
one
of the major countries
in the world, used to recruit a lot of global
talented Change the word
globally
people
to grow both Information technology and the
fame. Correct article usage
apply
As a result
, it worked at all, and people
(especially students studying abroad) from other countries
contributed in
developing Change preposition
to
IT
industry. For Correct article usage
the IT
this
, "Huawei", which
is Correct pronoun usage
apply
one
of the most essential company
in China.
In conclusion, a mixture of nationalities makes a specific Change to a plural noun
companies
nation
to be more attrative
Correct your spelling
attractive
from
creating new events and Change preposition
in
help
the country in developing industry Correct subject-verb agreement
helps
more
faster as well.Change the word
apply
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