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Houses are essential for people. Some people think that the government should offer free houses for people who cannot afford to pay for it. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In today’s society,
houses
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 are necessary for everyone,
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 some
people
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 argue that for those who do not have the ability to buy a house, the
government
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 has the responsibility to provide free
houses
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 for them. In my opinion, I tend to disagree with
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 point of view. The phenomenon that more and more young
people
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 cannot afford to pay for a house is ubiquitous nowadays.
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 an increase in the unemployment rate and a decrease in disposable income, and
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 a rise in the price of
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.
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, it is challenging for
people
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 to buy
houses
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.
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, recent research done by China shows that, in the past ten years, the portion of
people
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 who do not have their own
houses
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 experienced a dramatic increase. So it is impossible for the
government
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 to give each of them a free house,
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 will not only increase the pressure on the
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 budget but
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 foster
people
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’s dependence.
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, if the
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 offer free
houses
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 for
people
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,
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 will make
people
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 lose their motivation for work, which can decrease productive efficiency and
thus
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 lower the country’s GDP.
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,
although
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 it is impossible for the
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 to provide free
houses
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, the
government
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 can give subsidies to those
people
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 who have problems
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buying
houses
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 or those
people
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 who have
income
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incomes
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 lower than the average income.
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,
people
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 can have a chance to purchase
houses
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 without losing their passion for working. In a nutshell, I believe that it is not the
government
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's responsibility to give free
houses
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,
people
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 ought to own
houses
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 through their own effort.
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