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The chart bar gives information about the UK`s ageing population in 1985 and makes predictions for 2035.

The chart bar gives information about the UK`s ageing population in 1985 and makes predictions for 2035.
The chart bar gives information about the
UK
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`s ageing
population
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 in 1985 and makes predictions for 2035.
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, the
amount
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 of people
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 predicted to grow up in all
UK
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 countries. In 1985, the largest
percentage
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 of
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population
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the population
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 aged 65+ was in Wales amounting
about
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 16%. The
percentage
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population
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 of England and the
UK
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 were 1% lesser than in Wales, about 15%. In the same way, the
percentage
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 of Scotland was 14%. And the lowest
percentage
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 of
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population
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the population
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 was in Northern Ireland, approximately 12%.
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Percentage
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population
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the population
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 aged 65 and over in
UK
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contries
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countries
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 going to increase in 2035. The highest
population
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percentage
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 will be approximately 26% in Wales, and the second highest rate will be in Scotland, it will grow up from the second lowest to the second highest, from 14% to 25%. Three others, including England, Nothern Ireland and the
UK
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 will have the same
population
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 growth, it will be about 23% in 2035.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, uk, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "gives" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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