The presented pie chart illustrates the household spending of Japanese and Malaysian in 2010.

The presented pie chart illustrates the household spending of Japanese and Malaysian in 2010.
The presented pie chart illustrates the household spending of Japanese and Malaysian in 2010.
Overall
, it is obvious that the proportion of other goods and services and food was the highest budget costs in
Japan
and
Malaysia
.
In addition
, people allocated money for health care and the means of transport in
Japan
was double that in
Malaysia
. In Malaysian households, the greatest proportion of costs belonged to housing with 34%
while
there was less money
spending
Replace the word
spent
show examples
for households in
Japan
, compared to Malaysians which was 21%. The figure for other goods and services represented the highest proportion of Japanese households at 29%, slightly higher than that of
Malaysia
, at 26%. Both countries accounted for 24%
for
Change preposition
of
show examples
Japanese
housings
Fix the agreement mistake
housing
show examples
and 27%
for
Change preposition
of
show examples
Malaysian
housings
Fix the agreement mistake
housing
show examples
. Turning to the remaining
spendings
Fix the agreement mistake
spending
show examples
, in both countries, the percentage of health care was a small minority. The figure for health care in
Japan
was double that in
Malaysia
with 6% and 3%. Interestingly,
a
Correct article usage
the
show examples
number of transport in
Malaysia
was double higher than in
Japan
with 10% and 20%.
Submitted by joyce.ta213 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words japan, malaysia with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "presented" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
What to do next:
Look at other essays: