The pie chart shows the online sales for retail sectors in Canada in the year 2005 & 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart shows the online sales for retail sectors in Canada in the year 2005 & 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The pie chart shows the online sales for retail sectors in Canada in the year 2005 & 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts compare the
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e-commerce
commerce
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sales
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of four retail sectors in Canada in the
year
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2005 & 2010.
Overall
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, the proportion of online
sales
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for food and beverages and video games increased from 2005 to 2010,
while
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the figures for electronics&
appliance
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and home furnishing decreased. In 2005, the percentage of
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e-commerce
commerce
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purchases of food and beverages was 22%, but
this
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surged to 32% in 2010.
In addition
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, the proportion
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internet
sales
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of video games slightly increased from 18% to 23% in 2005 and 2010 respectively.
Moreover
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, the percentage of online
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of Home Furnishings was 25% in 2005,
whereas
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this
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figure dropped dramatically to 15% in 2010.
Similarly
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, there was a slight dip in the
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commerce
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sales
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of
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the Electronics
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& Appliance sector, which dropped from 35% in 2005 to 30% in 2010. In conclusion, the proportion of online
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of Electronic& Appliance and Home Furnishings declined from 2005 to 2010.
In contrast
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, the
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e-commerce
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commerce
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sales
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of
other
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two sectors amplified in 2010 than 2005

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words commerce, sales with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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