ou should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Whether or not someone achieves their aims is mostly by a question of luck. To what extent do you agree or not agree?
People have different views about whether or not
someone
achieves their aims is
mostly by a question of luck. To my way of thinking, Unnecessary verb
apply
someone
achieves their aims mainly related to their hard-working and talent
. In this
essay, i
will discuss both views and give some reasons.
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I
To begin
with, hard-working is the key determinant of someone
achieves
their aims. To work out something, you always need to pay a lot of time and energy. Wrong verb form
achieving
For example
, if you want to learn a new language, you should spend much
time on vocabulary,grammar,writing and speaking. All Correct quantifier usage
apply
this
four parts need practice for a long time. Correct determiner usage
these
Therefore
, to master a language, hard-working is necessary.
In addition
, talent
is also
a very important factor in someone
achieve
their aims. A man with Wrong verb form
achieving
a
high Remove the article
apply
talent
in one field can understand the theory and overcome problems more quakily than someone
don'
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doesn't
t
have talent
in this
field. For example
, go is traditional chess which popular
in east Add a missing verb
is popular
asia
, a famous go-player called Change the capitalization
Asia
shin-jinseo
didn'Change the capitalization
Shin-jinseo
t
have a high-level teacher when he study go, but he depends on his talent
and deep understanding of ai to achieve many world champions in this
sport. By the
contrast, every year there are many people study go in Correct article usage
apply
east
Asia and some of them have world-champion teachers to teach them, but they don'Capitalize word
East
t
achieve good results.
Admittedly, luck, to some extent, is also
a
important factor for Change the article
an
someone
achieve
their aims. Fix the infinitive
to achieve
For example
, you need to join an exam but unfortunately
you occurred Add a comma
,unfortunately
a
Correct article usage
apply
severe
ill before the exam, you can'Change the word
severely
t
keep a good condition during the exam and are unable to perform to your original level.
To conclude
, i
concede that luck Change the capitalization
I
play
Change the verb form
plays
a
important role in Change the article
an
someone
achieve their aims. Nevertheless
, i
am convinced that hard-working and Change the capitalization
I
talent
are the more important factors in someone
's achievement their
aims.Change preposition
of their
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