Whether or not someone achieves their aims is mostly by a question of luck. To what extent do you agree or not agree?

People have different views about whether or not

someone

achieves their aims

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mostly by a question of luck. To my way of thinking,

someone

achieve

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their aims mainly related to their hard-working and

talent

. In

this

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,

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will discuss both views and give some reasons.

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with, hard-working

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the key determinant of

someone

achieves their aims. To work out something, you always need to pay a lot of time and energy.

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, if you want to learn a new language, you should spend

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time on

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vocabulary

,

grammer

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,writing and speaking. All

this

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four parts need practice

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long time.

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, to master a language,

hard- working

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is necessary. In

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addition

,

talent

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is

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a very important factor in

someone

achieve their aims. A man with

a

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high

talent

in one field can understand

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and overcome problems more quakily than

someone

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t

have

talent

in

this

field.

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which popular in east

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, a famous go-player called

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didn'

t

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a

high level

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teacher when he study go, but he

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on his

talent

and deep

understading

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understanding

of ai to

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many world champions in

this

sport. By

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contrast, every year there are many people study go in east

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and some of them have

world champion

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to teach them, but they don'

t

achieve good results. Admittedly, luck, to some extent,

also

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a

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important factor for

someone

acheive

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their aims.

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, you need to join

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exam but

unfortnately

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unfortunately

you

occured

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occurred

a

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severe ill before the exam, you can'

t

keep a good condition during the exam and

unable

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to perform to

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original level.

To conclude

,

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concede that luck

play

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a

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important role in

someone

achieve their aims.

Nevertheless

,

i

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am convinced that hard-working and

talent

are the more important factors in

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achieve

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their aims.