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The charts below give information on the ages of the population of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevat

The charts below give information on the ages of the population of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevat
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The pie chart illustrated the demographic change in three different age groups(0-14
years
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, 15-59
years
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, and over 60
years
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)  in
Yemen
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 and Italy in 2000 and expectations for 2050.
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it is clear that
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while
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 in
Yemen
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 the population of 0-14
years
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 and 15-59
years
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 is expected to remain constant in 2050,  in Italy  the share of them is predicted to decline significantly in 2050 compared to 2000. Looking at the pie chart more closely, one can see that the youngest account for the largest percentage of the total with just over half in
Yemen
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.
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, the share of the middle age group makes up the greatest proportion of the population at 61.6
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. the biggest difference is founded in the over-60 age group in 2050. In
Yemen
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, its figure is only 5.7
percent
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, but in Italy that portion of them
approximately
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is approximately
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 close to 50
percent
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per cent
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.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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