There should be capital punishment for extremely violent crimes. Some other however believe it isn't morally right to kill criminals. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Extremely violent
crimes
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creates
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a huge damage
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society. Violent
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itself
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creates fear, trauma, and vulnerable condition for any human being around
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, especially the direct victims. Extremely violent
crimes
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can vary from terrorism to
genocides
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genocide
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. All extremely violent
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are forbidden by the United Nations through some
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and regulations.
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, a harsh punishment is needed to make sure the perpetrators pay for their
deed
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.
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, in the name of human rights, other people might think it wasn't right to kill criminals. It
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that violent
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crimes
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subjects were human before they were criminals. But in my opinion, it is better to put a death sentence
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perpetrators of extreme violent
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. They deserved an equal punishment
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the damage they have
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done to
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society.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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