There should be capital punishment for extremely violent crimes. Some other however believe it isn't morally right to kill criminals. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Extremely violent
crimes
creates
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a huge damage
for
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society. Violent
crimes
itself
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creates fear, trauma, and vulnerable condition for any human being around
it
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, especially the direct victims. Extremely violent
crimes
can vary from terrorism to
genocides
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genocide
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. All extremely violent
crimes
are forbidden by the United Nations through some
treaty
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and regulations.
Therefore
, a harsh punishment is needed to make sure the perpetrators pay for their
deed
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.
However
, in the name of human rights, other people might think it wasn't right to kill criminals. It
is believe
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that violent
crimes
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crime
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subjects were human before they were criminals. But in my opinion, it is better to put a death sentence
to
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perpetrators of extreme violent
crimes
. They deserved an equal punishment
to
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the damage they have
been
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done to
the
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society.
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