Some people believe that it is wrong to keep animals in zoo while others think that zoo are both entertainment and fun, discuss both the views and give Ur opinions.
All over the world, there are
both
people who think that keeping animals in zoos is wrong and people who think it is not a negative action . I will present both views and Correct pronoun usage
apply
then
I will give my opinion in the following paragraphs.
Firstly
,a big
number of individuals believe that it is fun and educative to see creatures from all over the globe. They go to the zoo to see different species they have never seen before , Correct word choice
large
such
as gorillas or elephants. Some adults consider zoos educative places from where they have fun with their children while
learning new information about the adaptation mechanisms of different species . For example
, a boy can find out how lions find food . Moreover
, just hearing the sounds that some species produce is a unique experience for the young.
Secondly
, there is the other part of the population which thinks that keeping animals in zoos destroys creature's
Change noun form
their
life
. They can't live in their ordinary habitat and can't fulfil their life purpose. Finding food will no longer be a problem for captured mammals , and they will not need to fight to survive. I agree that keeping them in an artificial sanctuary just for us ,individuals, to have fun once a year is a wrong action because these animals had a life before and we have no right over nature. Fix the agreement mistake
lives
For instance
, a family of lions can be destroyed if humans take the leader .
In conclusion, I believe that keeping creatures in captivity just for us, humans, to entertain ourselves is a bad thing not only because we stop them from living a normal growth, but also
because we torment them.Submitted by zaineajessica on
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coherence and cohesion
Ensure that the introduction directly addresses the task by presenting a clear overview of the main points that will be discussed. The conclusion should also summarize the key points and provide a clear opinion on the topic.
task achievement
Provide more specific and relevant examples to support the points made. Ensure that the response covers all aspects of the topic and provides a balanced discussion of both views.