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Some people think secondary school students should study international news as one of their subjects, while others believe that this is a waste of valuable school time. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Over recent years, more and more we have been able to obtain information from other
countries
 with globalization and arguments have persisted as to whether
students
 should be exposed to
a foreign cultures
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 to introduce them as one of the
subjects
. In my opinion, I disagree with the opinion that
this
 idea is a waste of time for
students
 to focus on their school life.
This
 essay will consider the facts of both points.
To begin
 with, understanding other
countries
' current events would allow
students
 to be global human resources. It is beneficial for individuals and the world that young
people
 are exposed to foreign cultures since they can broaden their horizons and be open-minded. Those
people
 would be expected that they contribute
our
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 society to improve.
Additionally
, they could grow up to be
people
 without bias towards other
countries
'
people
 or cultures because they accept and understand diversity through education in their school.
On the other hand
, it is true that there would be too many
subjects
 for
students
 to study if they were obligated to learn about international news as one of their
subjects
 in school. In spite of the fact that they may not have knowledge about their domestic information, studying other
countries
' current events makes young
people
 confused. Not only
this
, but usually
students
 engage in studying several fields of study,
such
 as math, English, science, and so on, to get high scores on exams. When it comes to adding a new subject, it would lead to an increased burden on
students
. In conclusion,
although
 it would certainly have a positive impact on
students
 to study global news, there are aspects that make it challenging to introduce it as one of the
subjects
.
However
, I do not believe that acquiring global information is a waste of time.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Global awareness
  • Critical thinking
  • Global citizenship
  • Cultural diversity
  • Communication skills
  • Historical context
  • World affairs
  • Academic subjects
  • Bias
  • Misinformation
  • Age-appropriate
  • Media literacy
  • Educational enrichment
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