The chart below shows the results of a survey of people who visited four types of tourist attraction in Britain in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the results of a survey of people who visited four types of tourist attraction in Britain in 1999.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The supplied illustration of pie charts represents
outcome
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of research
in
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four types of tourist
ameneties
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amenities
in Britain in 1999.
Overall
, it is obvious that
museum
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museums
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and galleries which make up 37% and theme
parks
which occupy 38% of the chart are almost on the same level in terms of visiting. It is conspicuous that theme
parks
consist of 5 parts,
such
as Blackpool Pleasure Beach, Aton Towers, Pleasureland, Chessington World of Adventures and Legoland, as
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can be seen Blackpool Pleasure Beach takes up practically half of the visits of theme
parks
.
Furthermore
, Wildlife
Parks
and Zoes are in
last
place with 9%,
while
historic houses and
monument
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monuments
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attract more attention by 16%.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words parks with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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