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It student, were given tie choce between not to study and study Most of the time They would Choose not to study. Do you agree or disagree with the following Statements?

#student #tie #choce #study #time #statements
It is a fact that
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students get a choice between
study
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studying
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 or not
to study
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modt
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most
 of the time. They will definitely pick the second option. I strongly agreed
on
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this
 and
giving
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 the rational reasons in
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 essay. One of the main
reason
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 behind
this
 tendency of the pupils is less Oriented towards goals.
On the other hand
, they are not enough matured during their academic days which
make
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 them more likely to
persue
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pursue
 other activities rather than worried about focusing
their
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 ambitions. In a survey, it found that 80%of
childerns
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children
 do not concentrate on
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 studies because they do not know the value of it. Another reason behind
this
 negative trend Is
lackment
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lacking
 of guidance. As in, in modern
era
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 parents are more engaged in their own work though they do not get much involvement in their
childrens
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 life which leads to less strictness towards studies.
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, they prefer to opt
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gedgets
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gadgets
instead
 of
use
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using
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 their valuable time
in
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on
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 studies.
To
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 conclusion, I think
childrens
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children
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 should not
blamed
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 for it because
they
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the
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gurdians
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guardians
 have a responsibility to lead them to a path where they are more likeable to
learning
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learn
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.
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