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Some people agree that the best way to become successful in life is to get the university education. Others disagree with it and reckon that nowadays it is no longer true. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The purpose of higher
education
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 has been a subject of debate for decades.
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 some claim that it is no longer necessary to go to
college
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 to succeed in life, I believe university
education
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 still has an
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 impact on one’s life. It is true that success is possible without a
college
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 degree.
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 some industries are more likely to require diplomas and certificates,
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 as fields of psychology or hard sciences, many others rely more on related skills;
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 technology and business. There are plenty of CEOs of tech firms who have built billion-dollar companies without finishing tertiary
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.
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, the truth is that a
college
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 degree is still a rite of passage for many careers. When hiring candidates in a field, employers prefer those who have completed a higher level of
education
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.
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 is because educational requirements are quick and easy ways to narrow down the pool of applicants, especially when there are more than enough job hunters. Indeed, the fewer years of
education
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 one has completed, the fewer doors are open to him or her. More importantly, the role of
college
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 is to provide learning communities where prepared minds are nurtured. As members of these communities, students are not information recipients who acquire knowledge in a passive way;
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, they are challenged to achieve their potential and indeed to excel.
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, universities offer learning conditions that encourage students to remain curious;
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value diversity in opinions;
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think critically and
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communicate effectively. In
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 way, students can gain problem-solving experience and confidence, and
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 process contributes to the development of their abilities and personalities, which is the key to a successful life.
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, being successful does not necessarily hinge on a
college
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 degree, but for most high school graduates, the pursuit of higher learning is paramount to future success in today’s world.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • university degree
  • specialized knowledge
  • critical thinking skills
  • networking opportunities
  • vocational training
  • self-made entrepreneurs
  • gig economy
  • online courses
  • certifications
  • formal education
  • practical experience
  • lifelong learning
  • career goals
  • individual circumstances
  • academic qualifications
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