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It is now possible for scientists and tourists to travel to remote natural environments, such as the South Pole. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays,
due to
 advancements in travel and technology, the
people
 who are researchers and tourists are able to visit unexplored
areas
 like the South Pole.
While
 there are some drawbacks associated with access to isolated natural
areas
, I believe the main benefits are more substantial. On the one hand, a potential disadvantage of travelling to
areas
 of outstanding natural beauty may be environmental destruction. Natural resources will be destroyed by humans.
For example
, they may cut down trees and cause irreparable to the environment. Another perceived negative is that damage to the ecosystem and minor forms of pollution.
People
 might destroy wildlife habitats and
this
 will lead to the extinction of several species of animals and plants.
As well as
this
, the amount of waste that
people
 produce will increase since most
people
 do not think about the consequences of dropping rubbish.
However
, governments and organizations could provide training for researchers and tourists to be aware of the features of remote natural spots.
Therefore
,
this
 can act as a deterrent to the threat to the environment.
On the other hand
, a primary advantage of visiting spot rare environments is discovering unexplored
areas
 provides an opportunity for
people
 to enhance their knowledge about the planet and its inhabitants.
For example
, by exploring the North Pole, scientists can learn about the life of polar bears, which live far away from humans. A
further
 benefit is gaining more data about climate change and global warming. The newly acquired knowledge can serve as a foundation for significant advancements in the field of
this
 challenge since global warming will have a significant impact on our planet.
Thus
, these research findings are vital. On balance, it is true that travel to far-flung destinations would seem disadvantageous under certain circumstances.
However
, in my view, its positive effects in terms of knowing our planet better and getting useful information about natural calamities override the disadvantages.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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