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The three pie charts illustrate the changes in annual spending by local government in Someland in three different year

The three pie charts illustrate the changes in annual spending by local government in Someland in three different year
Reporters made a graph that shows rates of female unemployment in four
country
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countries
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 of the United States, so we can compare the
percent
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per cent
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 difference in 2013 and in 2014. Unemployment is a major problem, sometimes
its
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it's
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 hard for women to find a good job so they stay unemployed or at home. Four countries show different results, some are higher than
previous
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the previous
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 year,
others
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and others
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 are below than before.
For
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In
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 contrast, the highest
rate
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 of four is England in 2013
being
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apply
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6,8 %,
however
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 next year aka in 2014 the
percent
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percentage
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 fell and became 6,5% .The lowest
rate
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 is in
country
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the country
a country
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 named Northern Ireland in 2014 with 4.6%,
means
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which means
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 most of the women are employed in
this
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 city. In the graph England, Wales and Northern Ireland show that their
rate
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 of unemployment decreased,
by
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contrast
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 Scotland shows that its
rate
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 only
rised
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raised
rose
 being 6,7%
although
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its
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it's
it is
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 still not the highest
percent
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percentage
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 4 times.
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