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IELTS Map of a City Hospital (IELTS Cambridge 13) The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

IELTS Map of a City Hospital (IELTS Cambridge 13) The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Road
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 access to
city
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hospital
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hospitals
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 has gone through some developments in 3 years between 2007 and 2010. Recent changes
of
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to
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 the
road
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 and public facilities were done to move
city
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hospital
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hospitals
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 more accessible.
Firstly
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, there is a new bus station in
south
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the south
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 of
hospital
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the hospital
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, replacing the older ones which
was
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were
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 located
alongsides
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alongside
along sides
 of Hospital Rd. The government
also
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 built not only
one
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 but two roundabouts The first
one
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 is on the
City
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Road
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, connected with Hospital Rd and Bus Station, and the other is connecting
bus
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the bus
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 station and Ring
Road
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.
This
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 might help
reducing
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reduce
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traffic
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the traffic
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 of
vehicle
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vehicles
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 going into and from the hospital.
Lastly
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, in 2007, the
City
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 Hospital had only
one
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cark
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car
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 park located on the southeast from the hospital. Three years later,
City
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 Hospital has two parking lots. Public cars should be parked in
public
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the public
a public
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 car park
at
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to
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 the east of the
city
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 hospital. The old car park became hospital staff only. So,
in other words
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, the new parking lot has more capacity than the old
one
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.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, city, one with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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