Some people believe that entertainers are more important than scientists in today's world. Do you agree or disagree?

In today's world, it is often argued that entertainers hold a more important role compared to
scientists
.
This
essay disagrees with the contributions of entertainers
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more impactful than
scientists
in the modern world because they
reasearch
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research
and create new
technologies
and improve everyone's health
standard
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standards
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.
To begin
, new
technologies
are important for both efficiency
or
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and
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entertainment because it allows humans to have reduced workload with the help of new and improved machines
while
also
enjoys
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the happiness that
technologies
provide.
For example
, in a car factory with the help of
robot
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a robot
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arm, line workers have their workload largely reduced and during their break, workers
uses
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smartphones and tablets to either watch videos or play games have increased their happiness.
Furthermore
, the role of
scientists
have
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a big impact
in
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on
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medical
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industry as new medical
technologies
helps
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help
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decrease the risk of some operations.
For instance
, an operation that
require
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the surgeon to perform
pixel perfect
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accuracy on the patient would be
dificult
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difficult
because
humans
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humans'
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hands are not as steady compares to a robot arm.
Besides
that, it
also
helps with the accuracy of diagnosis which will definitely lower the risk of human error with accurate
result
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results
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. To illustrate, a doctor identified the patient with
early stage
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cancer,
however
, the doctor would choose to perform
a
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MRI scan on the patient for a more accurate diagnosis. In conclusion,
scientists
are the key to creating new
technologies
to enhance the quality of life and happiness in people.
Although
entertainers have the ability to make someone happy, are
nevertheless
fall below what
scientists
can give.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural enrichment
  • emotional relief
  • global challenges
  • science communicators
  • medical advancements
  • educational programs
  • societal value
  • complementary roles
  • influencers
  • blurred lines
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