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Students should be taught academic knowledge so that they can pass exams, and skills such as cooking or dressing should not be taught. To what extent do you agree/disagree?

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The graph shows information about
popularity
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the popularity
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basketball
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of basketball
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, tennis, badminton and
rugby
 in a particular region between 1985 and 2005. It shall be noted, that sport
realy
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really
 has
own
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its own
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 fans and it says, that zone, where was the survey, was developed.
The
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Rugby
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rugby
 had an apogee in 1985 with more, than 200 people,
who
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apply
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interested
this
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in this
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 sport, but after
apogee
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the apogee
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allways
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always
start
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starts
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 a fall and
rugby
 is
not
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no
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 exception. In 2005
budminton
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badminton
 and
rugby
 had
a
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apply
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combining results, that exist the minimum for
whole
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the whole
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 period for
rugby
. The
tabale
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table
 as well
has
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as
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 a positive statistic. Tenis has been growing in reputation
sience
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since
science
 1985 and never stopped. In 1995
tenis
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tennis
 was on
common
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a common
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 level with
rugby
, which,
how
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as
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 we can notice, has been in recession. Only basketball and
badmintone
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badminton
 had stability and stagnation: their results had not
changing
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changed
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 for
whole
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the whole
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 history of observation, except
1990
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in 1990
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, when badminton and tennis were a
litle
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little
 bit with a loss in fame.
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