Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether. Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?

It is argued that reducing annual
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chances and avoiding
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flying in big groups by plane can be useful to tackle
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numerous ecological issues.
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there are certain benefits os
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,I believe it has more drawbacks in the long
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. One positive aspect of dropping annual
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times is that it could help other transportation systems to grow financially.
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,when people start to
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best
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the best
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option for
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travelling
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traveling
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traveling,
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thay
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they
may use more types of transportation.
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result
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the more eco-friendly transport sectors may develop
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increase
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an increase
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in daily usage.
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cars,trains,subways,buses and bikes would gain more popularity. Another benefit would be the elimination of burning
oil based
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products above
atmosphere
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the atmosphere
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.
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is because nowadays any kind of plane can not be produced by
eco-friendly
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fuel consuming
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engine.
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,in turn,might result
emiliration
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elimination
of air quality from thousands of meters high.
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,one drawback
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from these ideas.
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,when people start to use less air
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it might create
uncovenience
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inconvenience
and several problems for
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of lifes
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lifes
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lives
.
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,
ship
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the ship
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the
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only way of
traveling
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travelling
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among the oceans and
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continents
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could not fully replace
flight
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. From
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history
the
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, the
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main
aspects
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invention of planes is to cut
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the lenght
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lenght
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length
of
traveling
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time.Another negative impact is that other problems may evolve
hugely
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.When there
is
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no massive air flights with hundreds of passengers, other systems of
traveling
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travelling
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globally might face
lack
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a lack
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of energy supply and
specefic
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specific
condition
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conditions
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which only based on land. In conclusion ,despite the
economical
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and ecological benefits,
limitation
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flight
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amounts and users can be harmful
due to
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losing more time and more budget on land transportation in faced life.

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  • to give a clear example
  • such as
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  • to illustrate
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • reduce
  • benefits
  • environment
  • pollution
  • travel
  • businesses
  • individuals
  • challenges
  • meetings
  • connections
  • effort
  • manage
  • remotely
  • money
  • stress
  • local
  • culture
  • discovering
  • innovative
  • technology
  • ways
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