Some people feel that certain workers like nurses doctors and teachers are undervalued and should.be paid more

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issue of wage inequality has been heatedly debated by
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. Some people feel that certain workers should get more value and earn more money. I strongly believe that
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between them. From my personal experience as a daughter of a doctor, I know that medical income was much higher in the past. Doctors were much more respected,
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to singers and actors. When it comes to
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financial recognition, it is not fair
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of money with only a few
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of training.
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, we have been less careful about our heroes and interested
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subjects. Health and knowledge are our most valuable things and the ones responsible for them must
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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