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The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in London, 2000-2010

The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in London, 2000-2010
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The line graph below illustrates the information about the income of 3 bakeries in London between 2000 and 2010. As it is seen, two of the three bakeries - Barnie's Buns and Robbie's
Bakery
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 were growing slightly
while
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 the other one - Lovely Loaves was going down during the whole period. At the beginning of the period, Lovely Loaves had the highest earnings and amounted to almost 90 thousand pounds.
However
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, after 2004 the rates of
this
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bakery
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 decreased rapidly and amounted to 40 thousand pounds, dropping lower than its two competitors. By the way, the other bakeshop continued to grow and increase their income gradually till the end of 2010. Despite
this
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, after 2008 Lovely Loeves
also
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 became more stable.
In contrast
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, Barnie's Buns and Robbie's
Bakery
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 were going in the same way and both bakeries are developing annually by increasing their income. In conclusion, every
bakery
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 has enough opportunity to earn more money and to compete with each other again.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bakery with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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