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Plastic bags, plactic bottles and plastic packaging are bad for the environment. What damage does plastic do to the environment? What can be done by governments and individuals to solve this problem?

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It is an undeniable fact that
Plastic
 is
deterimental
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detrimental
for
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 the
environment
. Single-use
plastics
 in the forms of bags,
bottles
 and packaging is not only polluting
the
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nature but
also
 hazardous
for
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to
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the
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health.
Air
,
Water
 and Ground Pollution are just
few
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a few
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this
 non-renewable resource.
Govertment
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Government
 bodies and
the
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society members should equally contribute towards its solution. The following paragraphs will elaborate
the
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 negative effects of using
plastic
 and will provide some solutions in order to rectify the concerning issue.
To begin
 with, several studies have shown that
Plastic
 is adversely affecting
the
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nature.
Due to
 an upsurge in urbanization in recent years, more and more
plastic
 manufacturing industries are constructed and release exhaust fumes in the
air
;
consequently
, polluting the
air
.
Additionally
, several industries
dumps
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 the waste of
plastics
 into the grounds, which
further
 damage the soil quality, and the soil become infertile.
Furthermore
, tourists dump
the
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plastic
bottles
,
food
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and food
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 packages into
sea
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the sea
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 which is not only polluting the
water
 but
also
 damaging
the
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marine life.
Hence
, there
are
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myriad
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of
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reasons which shows that how
consumption
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the consumption
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 of
plastic
 is detrimental
for
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 the
environment
. Solutions to
this
 alarming cause are not very complex but simple and practical.
Firstly
,
government
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 should impose strict laws and high
penalities
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penalties
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 on the people and
also
 on industries,
who
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causes
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cause
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the
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damage to the
environment
.
Secondly
, organize awareness programs in urban and rural areas about the hazardous impacts of using
plastics
.
Moreover
, individuals can contribute to
make
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 the
environment
 healthy by becoming more responsible.
For instance
, they should use cloth bags for shopping and carry
water
bottles
 from home
while
 travelling outside to avoid purchasing
plastic
bottles
.
Additionally
, they can teach their children at home about the adverse effects of
plastics
. To recapitulate, there are numerous factors with respect to the use of
plastics
, which
is
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are
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 damaging the
environment
 like
air
,
water
 and ground pollution.
However
, it can be reversed by implementing simple solutions by
government
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the government
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 like public awareness,
strict
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and strict
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 laws and
also
 by individuals
such
 as
say
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saying
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 no to single-use
plastics
 products.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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