many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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think that their most significant aim is economic
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believe that other types of
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equally. Many
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consider only the economic features and do not tend to other types of
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their society could be able a successful one. Being successful in
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individuals to get high
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. They think that a developed
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employment. Individuals could be provided themselves
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houses and
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could address their financial problems. On the other side ،some
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believe that
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should consider cultural and environmental features equally.
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their point of view ،authority should think about cultural features and create a
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should not forget the environmental issues which
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could be so significant indexes for an advanced
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on economic subjects for providing an advanced
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believe that they should pay attention to other factors of
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  • environmental degradation
  • cultural heritage
  • technological innovation
  • wealth disparity
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  • healthcare system
  • education system
  • cultural diversity
  • policy decisions
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