the chart below shows information about subway systems in three major European cities.
The chart depicts information about one of the transportation systems in
London
, Paris
, and Moscow
.
In these three cities, the use of subway systems is different. For example
, Moscow
Metro
has the biggest number
of passengers
who use subway
daily. It has 6.5 million Correct article usage
the subway
passengers
each day which is much higher than Paris
Metro
with 4.5 million and London
Underground with 3 million. Although
,
Remove the comma
apply
Moscow
has the most passengers
, it has the minimum number
of stations
in operation which is unexpectable
. Replace the word
unexpected
London
Underground has 408
km track length which Correct article usage
a 408
cross
275 Change the verb form
crosses
stations
. London
Metro
is the longest one. While
,
with 300 km track length Moscows after that and Remove the comma
apply
Paris
Metro
with 214 km is the third one according to
the list.
Overall
, the subway systems have different number
of Fix the agreement mistake
numbers
passengers
, stations
and total track lengths in these cities. These
amount of Correct determiner usage
This
passengers
do not related to the length or the number
of stations
. For example
, Moscow
Metro
has the most amounts of entrance
but Fix the agreement mistake
entrances
Paris
has 300 stations
and London
has the longest Metro
in compare
with Moscows.Replace the word
comparison
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