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the chart below shows information about subway systems in three major European cities.

the chart below shows information about subway systems in three major European cities.
#information #subway #systems #three #european #cities
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The chart depicts information about one of the transportation systems in
London
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,
Paris
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, and
Moscow
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. In these three cities, the use of subway systems is different.
For example
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,
Moscow
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Metro
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 has the biggest
number
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 of
passengers
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 who use
subway
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the subway
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 daily. It has 6.5 million
passengers
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 each day which is much higher than
Paris
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Metro
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 with 4.5 million and
London
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 Underground with 3 million.
Although
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,
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Moscow
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 has the most
passengers
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, it has the minimum
number
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 of
stations
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 in operation which is
unexpectable
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unexpected
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.
London
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 Underground has
408
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a 408
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 km track length which
cross
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crosses
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 275
stations
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.
London
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Metro
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 is the longest one.
While
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,
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 with 300 km track length Moscows after that and
Paris
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Metro
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 with 214 km is the third one
according to
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 the list.
Overall
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, the subway systems have different
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number
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numbers
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 of
passengers
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,
stations
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 and total track lengths in these cities.
These
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This
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 amount of
passengers
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 do not related to the length or the
number
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 of
stations
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.
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,
Moscow
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Metro
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 has the most amounts of
entrance
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entrances
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 but
Paris
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 has 300
stations
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 and
London
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 has the longest
Metro
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 in
compare
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comparison
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 with Moscows.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "for example".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words london, paris, moscow, metro, number, passengers, stations with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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