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do you believe that self driving cars will become common in the near future ? why or why not?

#self #cars #future
In our modern ,world everything is changing rapidly. Technology is the main thing in our life so
that
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as
an mobile phones
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a mobile phone
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 developed, self-driving cars will become our
everydays nessecity
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everyday necessity
 in the next century. As
,
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 the population grows faster than before and the lack of transportation is appearing nowadays.
Transportation
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 system will not be able to be beneficial for the next years. Because, not only the transportation has to be developed, but
also
 it should meet the needs of each person in the entire world.
Moreover
,
this
 new version of transferring people, self-driving cars, is the new way to reduce
the
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carbon dioxide and crowd congestion in the street. Because, whenever cities become a bee hive the dark cloud
has
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surounded
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surrounded
 the cities.
This
 method
make
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 the dream come true so that each commuter can enjoy their morning and
working
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 with their laptops
while
 they are
in
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the
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 way to go to their work. Self-driving cars have a good
safty
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safety
 because they have a special sensor that can be aware of every
obstecles
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obstacles
obstacle
in
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 the road .
moreover
, the need of having an individual driver has been solved. In conclusion,
this
 technology in my point of view will be expanded in the future. Because
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 the advantages
overcomes
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 the disadvantages as I said in
this
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