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the chart below shows literacy rates in several different countries around the world.

the chart below shows literacy rates in several different countries around the world.
#literacy #rates #countries #world
The chart illustrates literacy ratios in four different
countries
 and in the whole world. Well, in these
countries
 the percentage of
males
are
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 higher than
females
.
While
, the difference is greater in
country
 A and
country
 B.
moreover
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, in these two
countries
males
 have around 70 per cent and
females
 have 30 % literacy rates. The population has grouped people to the group age 15 and over.
Although
, in
country
 D the rate of
females
 and
males
are
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is
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 the same
with
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 99 per cent.
Besides
,
total
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 population has shown different numbers. In
country
 A the least adults have been literate, with 47.8%. but, in
country
 D we can
observed
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 the most ratio in the whole chart.
Although
,
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 the differences are noticeable in several
countries
, for
the
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both
males
 and
females
, the group named the world rates are constantly near.
Overall
, the amount of adult literate rates in these
countries
 shows that
males
 are having the most part of
the
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percentages and the ratio of these in the entire world is
ecceptable
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acceptable
 at
last
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, males, females, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratios" was used 3 times.
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