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The line graph show the average number of weekly patients visiting for clinic of a hospital from 2010 to 2016.

The line graph show the average number of weekly patients visiting for clinic of a hospital from 2010 to 2016.
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The provided line chart illustrates the average
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 of
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 by
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a week
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 of four different hospital clinics over a-six year period between 2010 and 2016. Looking more closely at the trend for the graphs, it can be clearly seen that an upward trend is observed for all graphs except the
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 where a fluctuating trend is seen.
According to
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 the chart, in 2010, the
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clinic
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 was the most popular
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,
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 250
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, followed by the eye and dental clinics,
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 and 100
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 respectively.
In addition
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, the diabetic
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 was the least, 70
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. The
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 for
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control
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 revealed a fluctuation at approximately 250
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 over the period,
whereas
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 there was a surge of the eye
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 to overtake the
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control
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 and reach a peak at 350
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 in 2016 Meanwhile, a gradual growth of dental
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 took place from 100
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 in 2010 to 130
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 in 2016.
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,
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 is followed by a moderate rise of diabetic
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 by 80
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 from 70
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 to 180
patients
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 between 2010 and 2016.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words figure, patients, birth, control, clinic with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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