It is important for the childern to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. puninshment is necesssary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? what sort of punishment parents and teachers be allowed to use?

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It is now evident that one of the most important responsibilities of parents is to teach their offspring how to distinguish right from wrong and some people believe that

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lesson should be delivered through

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. In my opinion,

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can be an optimal method, but it should be used in

proper

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way and in

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situation.

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, I believe that it is essential for children in the way of developing their character to face the consequences of their wrong

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they would be

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responsible

adult

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in their future life.

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, there are ethics and principles in each family, society and culture which should be transferred through generations and the indeed method should

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the juvenile deeply but

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long

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term, and considering suitable and minor penalties can fulfil

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purpose.

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, if parents just pamper children and spoil them by over-fulfilling their needs without any penalty for their bad

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, the

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child adult

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would be vulnerable and unable to manage his/her adult life and find it impossible to handle his/her social duties.

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, the

punishment

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should be properly considered for a young

child

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. Some guardians go far behind and hurt their kids physically or hurt their feelings by scolding them or ignoring their basic emotional needs which can lead to serious issues in future, especially when it comes to communication and socialization. Some minor and effective punishments can be applied

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as withdrawing their privileges for a short time until the

child

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compensate

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for his mistake or some restrictions can be imposed

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depriving him

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watching television for 2 days.

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, parents should consider the age for imposing a penalty, a teenager should not be treated like a young

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and harsh punishments can have

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effect on them and can even lead them to social

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and crimes. In conclusion, I opine that

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form of

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according to

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child’s

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the child’s

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age and different situations can be not only efficient but

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suitable.

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