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In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

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There is no doubt that these days, every parents support their
children
 and tell them that they are capable of doing anything if they want to. The question is, what are the pros and cons of giving your
children
such
 a
message
? In
this
 essay, I’m going to discuss the advantages and disadvantages of giving your
children
this
message
. To start, the positive
sides
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 of giving your child
this
message
,
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 is that you will encourage them to be successful people.
In other words
, when you tell your
children
this
message
, they will overcome any obstacles they go through.
Also
, telling them that they can achieve anything they go through will make them feel confident. To illustrate, telling
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children
 supportive talk will make them believe in their abilities and boost their confidence.
Finally
, when you tell your
children
 that they can achieve anything they want they will get more motivated.
However
,
this
message
 can have negative sides too. And one of them is, some
children
 are not capable of achieving their dreams, even if they tried hard. The reason given to support
this
 claim is, no one is capable of achieving everything they want, and giving them
such
 a false hope will have a negative impact on them.
For instance
, if you told your child that he can achieve something and he didn’t achieve it, even though he tried hard.
This
 will
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 him
to feel
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 guilty, unlike if his parents told him that it is acceptable to fail sometimes. In conclusion, I believe that the pros are better than the cons since most
of
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successful people are those whose parents told them that they can achieve anything they want if they put their mind
into
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 it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • achieve
  • try hard
  • positive mindset
  • self-belief
  • motivates
  • ambitious goals
  • resilience
  • determination
  • confidence
  • self-esteem
  • growth mindset
  • unrealistic expectations
  • disappointment
  • failure
  • effort
  • hard work
  • seek support
  • individual differences
  • abilities
  • capabilities
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