Every one of us should become a vegeterian because eating meat can cause serious health problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In
this
era, most people prefer to be non-vegetarian as they find it tasty. Linking Words
However
, I agree with the statement that people should become vegetarian as medical issues are rising Linking Words
due to
the consumption of meat but, I will mention some of the benefits of being non-vegetarian.
There are many health issues rising in our day-to-day Linking Words
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because of Fix the agreement mistake
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To begin
with, in the past 2 ,decades many diseases Linking Words
are
introduced to mankind Wrong verb form
have been
due to
the consumption of pork, chicken etc. Linking Words
For example
, in the previous decade swine flu came into existence Linking Words
due to
the meat of infected pigs. As the disease was airborne it didn't take much time to spread in the world even the death ratio went to 39% in just a few days of starting. Linking Words
Furthermore
, there are more chances of getting Linking Words
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poisoning by the consumption of flesh if they are not well preserved. For ,instance if the meat is not stored in cold storage and is consumed it might get Use synonyms
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poisoning.
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On the other hand
, it is useful to provide high proteins and vitamins to the body. The highest B12 is found in fish if someone has a problem with B12 doctors suggest eating fish in their dinners as they help to recover speedily from that problem. Even eggs have heavy protein in them so it’s advisable to consume eggs.
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To conclude
, as I mentioned the reasons why agree with the statement but Linking Words
also
, I find it important to have non-veg Linking Words
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