The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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depict
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number
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a number
the number
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of tourists visiting a Caribbean
island
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from 2010 to 2017. It is clear from the graph that the different
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number
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numbers
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of
visitors
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staying on cruise ships and staying on
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island
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the island
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.
According to
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what is shown, in 2010 the
number
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of tourists
they
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apply
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staying was 2.5
million
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,
while
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the
number
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increased to 5
million
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in 2011, but it is wiggle after two years until it reached 1
million
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visitors
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in 2014. After 2014, it continued to rise until it reached 2
million
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respectively in 2017.
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those who went out to the
island
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, they were 750000
visitors
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and stay
same
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the same
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number
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after year in 2011.
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this
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, it is soar double in 2013.
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, it remained constant
during
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for
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three years and in 2016
its
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it
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decreased slightly to 1200000 and returned to 1500000 in 2017.
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the total of
visitors
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continue
rise
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to rise
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from 1
million
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in 2010 to 2.7
millions
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million
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in 2015. After it remained stable until 2016. It
is
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increased significantly by 800000 approximately in 2017.
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, we could say that the
people
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number of people
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staying on ships
were
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apply
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more than
staying
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those staying
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on
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island
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an island
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in 2017 unlike
2010
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in 2010
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, in general, the total of
visitors
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increasing
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increased
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gradually from 2010 until reached to peak in 2017 respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, island, visitors, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuating trend
  • initially
  • significant increase
  • slight decline
  • momentary setback
  • steady increase
  • minor fluctuations
  • reaching a peak
  • moderate growth
  • notable growth
  • surge in popularity
  • seasonal or yearly factors
  • stagnation
  • growing appeal
  • visitors worldwide
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