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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
 line chart
depict
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depicts
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number
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a number
the number
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 of tourists visiting a Caribbean
island
 from 2010 to 2017. It is clear from the graph that the different
number
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numbers
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 of
visitors
 staying on cruise ships and staying on
island
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the island
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.
According to
 what is shown, in 2010 the
number
 of tourists
they
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apply
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staying was 2.5
million
,
while
 the
number
 increased to 5
million
 in 2011, but it is wiggle after two years until it reached 1
million
visitors
 in 2014. After 2014, it continued to rise until it reached 2
million
 respectively in 2017.
While
 those who went out to the
island
, they were 750000
visitors
 and stay
same
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the same
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number
 after year in 2011.
Following
this
, it is soar double in 2013.
However
, it remained constant
during
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for
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 three years and in 2016
its
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it
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 decreased slightly to 1200000 and returned to 1500000 in 2017.
While
 the total of
visitors
 continue
rise
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to rise
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 from 1
million
 in 2010 to 2.7
millions
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million
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 in 2015. After it remained stable until 2016. It
is
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increased significantly by 800000 approximately in 2017.
To sum up
, we could say that the
people
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number of people
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 staying on ships
were
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apply
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more than
staying
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those staying
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 on
island
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an island
the island
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 in 2017 unlike
2010
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in 2010
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, in general, the total of
visitors
increasing
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increased
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 gradually from 2010 until reached to peak in 2017 respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, island, visitors, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuating trend
  • initially
  • significant increase
  • slight decline
  • momentary setback
  • steady increase
  • minor fluctuations
  • reaching a peak
  • moderate growth
  • notable growth
  • surge in popularity
  • seasonal or yearly factors
  • stagnation
  • growing appeal
  • visitors worldwide
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