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A person's worth nowadays seems to judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned value, such as honour, kindness, and trust no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays
people
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 who are doing high-paid jobs are
seemed
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 as worthy because of their high social status and material possessions. ,
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 I and others firmly agree, that the
person
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's value is in kindness , honour and so on. In the following paragraphs, I will discuss the reasons that urge me to think in
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 way.
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,
one
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 of my uncles worked in Bharat Heavy Electricals Limited.
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,he worked as a regular staff after that because of his hard work, he was appointed to a high post in the company. All of my relatives treated him as a high-quality
person
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.
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,
one
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 of my neighbours asked him for
money
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 for help but he refused to do it. Two years ago,he retired and came back to his hometown.
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, he was diagnosed with cancer and he doesn't have blood relatives to take care of him. At that time, when he refused to do help in the past that
person
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 now taking care of him. Now,he understands
money
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 is just the value.
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, some
people
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 are very kind-hearted and are working in a small company.
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 kind of
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 always shows kindness to others. Even though
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 they don't have enough
money
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 to run a family sometimes if someone asks them to help, they don't show any rejection.
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 of my school friends is from a poor background.
One
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 day, the charity visited our school and school management asked us to bring cash. Moving
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, me and my classmates were shocked to see that she brought more
money
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 compared to us. By seeing
this
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, my teachers praised her for her kindness. To summarise,
people
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's worth is in their behaviour not in the
money
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 how much they earn. So,
one
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 should not judge
people
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according to
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 social status.
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