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As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibilities. Do you agree or disagree?

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In light of achieving economic growth by reaping financial benefits from individuals, the question of whether companies have sufficiently contributed back to society has been a topic of public interest lately. One possible belief that some people, myself included,
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 is that enterprises,
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 social responsibilities. Opponents of companies bearing social responsibilities cite the fact that these businesses have indirectly contributed to the community just by being major taxpayers, and
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 the government, the main beneficiary of
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 tax levy, should be held accountable for social contributions.
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 thinking fails to factor in the untimeliness of any government actions, as evidenced by the fact that it would take a long time for a bill to be in effect because it has to go through complicated procedures until it can be sanctioned. That being the case, any policies issued by the government may fail to address local residents’ immediate problems
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 as poverty or lack of public infrastructure.
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 is why corporations should be a part of the social fabric and play a positive role in addressing societal challenges, by building roads or doing charitable works to lift up the standards of living of local dwellers.
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, not only do the timely decisions of businesses allow them to solve short-term problems for the locals, but
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 enable them to promote ecology sustainability in the long run. By considering the environmental impact of their operations, enterprises can adapt to evolving environmental expectations and promote the well-being of their employees.
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, if no liability is borne, companies will not invest in waste treatment systems to cut costs and discharge toxic industrial byproducts directly into the sewers, which would likely take a toll on wildlife and local residents for decades.
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 effect can be seen in the case of Formosa, a steel company located near the southern coast of Vietnam, releasing waste into the ocean and devastating marine life
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 the water source of local dwellers.
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 is a testament to the importance of corporate social responsibility in preserving the environment. In conclusion, I strongly support the belief that businesses should be responsible for the locality around their operating areas, considering the significant impact they have on residents' lives.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social responsibilities
  • Corporate social responsibility
  • Ethical behavior
  • Societal impact
  • Stakeholders
  • Profit-driven
  • Public perception
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Community development
  • Human rights
  • Workplace safety
  • Altruism
  • Balanced approach
  • Accountability
  • Consumer loyalty
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