Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to leam how to occupy themselves on their own. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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,me
is
important Correct subject-verb agreement
are
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in encouraging
encouraging
children to take part in organised group activities in their free time Change the verb form
to encourage
as well as
it's even important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own. My Linking Words
view point
is discussedCorrect your spelling
viewpoint
blow
.
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below
Firstly
, when kids are at Linking Words
very
young age and Add an article
a very
dont
know what to do at that time parents should help them to give Correct your spelling
don't
advices
. As they will join Change the wording
advice
pieces of advice
bits of advice
group
Correct article usage
a group
actitive
they will learn so many things like really of a Correct your spelling
active
activity
people
. Use synonyms
For example
, if Linking Words
family
will encourage the Add an article
the family
a family
child
to take part in sports Use synonyms
activites
but Correct your spelling
activities
Use synonyms
child
is Add an article
the child
a child
intersted
in painting Correct your spelling
interested
then
Linking Words
parents
should support that.
Correct article usage
the parents
Secondly
, when kids have grown up and Linking Words
able
to take Add a missing verb
are able
there
Replace the word
their
decision
at that age, Fix the agreement mistake
decisions
people
should take themselves Use synonyms
there
own Replace the word
their
decision
. If Fix the agreement mistake
decisions
Use synonyms
child
will Add an article
the child
a child
disside
Correct your spelling
decide
by
there own what to do Change preposition
on
then
he or she will learn more and more. Linking Words
Thirdly
, Linking Words
as
it is Correct word choice
apply
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the responsibilty
responsibilty
of old Correct your spelling
responsibility
people
to advise Use synonyms
young
Add an article
a young
person
. Adults should take help as much as possible and even old should Fix the agreement mistake
people
also
give that. If Linking Words
a
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apply
people
are giving help to younger Use synonyms
one
Correct pronoun usage
ones
then
they should follow it. Linking Words
For example
,Linking Words
a
person is Correct word choice
if a
intersted
in Correct your spelling
interested
the
swimming Correct article usage
apply
then
should tell Linking Words
there
father that he is interested in Replace the word
their
a
swimming.
In conclusion Remove the article
apply
from
my view, Change preposition
in
Use synonyms
Add an article
the child
a child
child
should have the freedom to Fix the agreement mistake
children
activities
Add a missing verb
do activities
by
own but on Change preposition
on
other
side parents should Correct article usage
the other
also
help Linking Words
to
them too. A person should join to some Change preposition
apply
actitives
in her free time it will Correct your spelling
activities
helpful
for them.Add a missing verb
be helpful
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