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It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at the early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children ?

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These days, it is widely acknowledged that raising
children
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 is challenging
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 the multitude of circumstances that influence their behaviour. They should be aware of the good and evil from an early age.
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, a penalty must be applied when they behave badly in order for them to learn from their errors. Parents and instructors have the responsibility of directing
children
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 along the proper path. I wholeheartedly concur with
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 statement. In the beginning, correcting
children
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's errors requires the application of punishment. As the world becomes more advanced, parenting today is more challenging than it was in the 19th century. Today's kids are curious and pampered; they have to get what they want, even if it hurts them. It appears that parents and instructors will find it easier to model excellent attitudes and behaviours in young
children
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. Kids will typically avoid bad behaviour if they are aware that it will result in negative consequences. Another thing to keep in mind is that punishment should always be intended to teach a lesson rather than harm the recipient physically or psychologically.
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, everyone should be aware of the severity of the punishment they are about to administer. If a child has done something wonderful, a reward system offering incentives should
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 be in place in order to encourage them to continue doing amazing things that we can be proud of. In order to teach our
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 and prevent them from encouraging bad behaviour, we must use punishments.
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, these penalties must be properly chosen so that our kids may learn from them and don't become more violent
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 of them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • punishment
  • positive reinforcement
  • consequences
  • time-outs
  • removal of privileges
  • open communication
  • clear expectations
  • consistency
  • fairness
  • disciplinary action
  • proportionate
  • moral values
  • internalization
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