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The diagram below shows time spent watching TV by age and gender in the UK in 1995 and 1999

The diagram below shows time spent watching TV by age and gender in the UK in 1995 and 1999
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The given bar chart illustrates the rate of time spending to watch
TV
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 in a particular
age
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group
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 (from 4
years
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 old until over 65
years
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 old) both for men and women in a
week
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 in Britain from 1995 until 1999.
Overall
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, the rate of time-consuming to watch
TV
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 in England underwent an upward trend for every
group
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 of
age
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, only
people
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 in the 4-15
age
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group
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 and the 25-34
age
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group
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 experience fluctuation. The highest rate of time allocated for watching
TV
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 was in elderly
people
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, and the lowest was in the children
age
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group
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. Looking into detail,
it is clear that
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people
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 in the
age
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group
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 of over 65
years
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 old allocated the most time to watch
TV
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 accounting for over 30
hours
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 compared to those in the 4-15
group
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 of
age
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 who only contributed under 20
hours
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 per
week
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.
Similarly
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,
people
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 55-64
years
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 old donate more than 25
hours
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 weekly,
while
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 those 45-54
years
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 old only gave below 25
hours
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 over the given period.
Furthermore
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, the figure for the 25-34
age
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group
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 allocates just about 26
hours
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 per
week
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 compared to those in 4-15 who only contribute under 20
hours
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 per
week
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. Both of the figures witnessed a fluctuation that only peaked at around 26
hours
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 per
week
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tv, age, group, years, week, people, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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