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Students should be taught academic knowledge so that they can pass exams, and skills such as cooking or dressing should not be taught. To what extent do you agree/disagree?

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Some people hold the view that academic knowledge should be given to
students
 so they can succeed in tests, and
life
skills
such
 as cooking or dressing shouldn’t be taught. I disagree with the view since pupils perform
as well as
 possible in
life
,both theoretical information and basic
life
 abilities should be provided in education. On the one hand, studying academic material is crucial for
students
 in different ways.
First,
academic subjects equip
students
 with fundamental knowledge that will be used in tertiary education.
For instance
, most undergraduates at Vietnam University have to pass some dangerous subjects like Advanced Mathematics or Microeconomics, which are made up of material taught in high
school
. Without enough comprehension,
students
 risk failing the final test and redoing the time-consuming and expensive study sessions on
this
 topic.
Second,
passing the exam with a high score may have advantages in future careers, studying abroad or getting a scholarship.
For example
, nowadays most big companies offer jobs with high benefits for excellent
students
 working in their company;
students
 with good academic performance and test scores will be recruited.
Nevertheless
, there are several reasons why
students
 still need to improve their practical
skills
. Gaining these essential
skills
 gives them more independence and confidence wherever they are. To do
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example, if they go to study abroad or travel alone without their family members, they can use the
life
skills
 that they learned, knowing how to prepare healthy and affordable meals by themselves
instead
 of eating out or impressing others by dressing.
Thus
, opening classes on
life
skills
 should be encouraged.
In addition
, attending skill-building classes at
school
 is an effective way to help
students
 relax after theoretical
subjects
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 time at
school
. In conclusion,
while
 academic knowledge should be taught to help pupils pass the exam, I strongly believe that
life
skills
also
 need to be considered at
school
 for student comprehensive development.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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