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Many people nowadays live in societies where consumer goods are relatively cheap Do you thing the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Today's era is significantly
advanced
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 than that of the past and
availability
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the availability
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 of cheap consumer
products
 attracts
people
 to buy things more frequently than ever before. Even though the living standard of
people
 has improved with
this
, I feel that the demerits of
this
trend
 cannot be overlooked. On
one
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 hand,
as a result
 of globalisation
people
 can access
the
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national and
the
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international
products
 at
an
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affordable
price
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prices
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.
For instance
, new gadgets
such
 as Android cell phones are available in the market at an acceptable price that everyone can afford. In a sense, the widespread use of
such
 technological devices has improved the way we communicate but
this
 is
also
 creating a throwaway society. The gap between the rich and poor has narrowed in terms of their ability to purchase consumer
products
. Living standard has improved and basic needs are easily met these days and more
people
 have the
opportunities
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opportunity
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 to select from more options.
As a result
,
people
 are purchasing things that do not even need. A single person has multiple cell phones and they are busy all day with their cell phones and
internet
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.
Thus
people
 are becoming less social.
The technology
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Technology
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 changes rapidly and
thus
people
 need to change the model of a product within
few
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a few
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 months. The amount of
wastage
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 created from these electronic devices is a matter of great concern.
Cheaper
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price
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prices
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 of cars and motorbikes are the primary reason for traffic congestion and the habit of purchasing
products
 that
people
 do not really need is a very bad
trend
.
On the other hand
,
due to
 the cheaply available goods, a newer
trend
 of material possession has emerged. Nowadays
people
 consider
this
 as their status symbol.
For example
,
people
 who possess
the
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branded gadgets or
latest
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the latest
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 cars earn a respectable position in
the
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society and
this
 is a degradation of morality and social value.
In addition
,
this
trend
 leads to
a
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throwaway culture and the amount of trash produced each day is increased dangerously.
As a
result
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 environmental pollution is irreversible.
Moreover
,
cheap
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 availability of
products
 motivates
people
 to consume
the
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unwanted
products
.
Last
 but not
the
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least, most of the technologies used for developing
cost effective
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products
 are harmful to human health and human life is jeopardised.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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