Some people think school should only teach academic subject. Others think school should also teach students how to discriminate between right and wrong. Discuss both view and give you own opinion.

For the past few decades, we can observe educational departments
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modifying their material to a high level. With that, the burden on students
also
raising which is resulting in minimizing extracurricular activities. Some people think that students should be instructed in academic subjects only.
While
on the other hand
, some people say that schools should
also
illuminate the difference between legal and illegal. I disagree with the aforementioned statement. In
this
essay, I will shed light on why moral education is
also
necessary despite only the academic subjects.
Firstly
,
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brain can work only for half an hour to half past effectively at a
time
, if not given a break or any refreshment the brain couldn't learn. Because of that, a large number of institutes prefer
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campaigns equally as academic.
Secondly
,
due to
busy schedules and lack of ,
time
students do not get enough
time
to learn ethics at their
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.
For instance
,
due to
the study burden of their assessment routines and evening academies, whole days are mostly spent outside the home. Responding to them to pay out much
time
with instructors. So, these moral values should be enlightened at educational places where student's most of their
time
is spent.
Although
, a book teaches and
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all sort of knowledge, the etiquette which can be learnt practically from our guides and environment cannot
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the accuracy and perfection.
Furthermore
, extracurricular activities needed to be promoted
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. they are essential for our body and mind to sustain them in active form and let them away from diseases to the possible level.
To sum up
, I would say that bookish knowledge is not worthwhile without being activeness to comply with decently. So, ethical knowledge is
also
crucial to promote
along with
academic subjects. As. the government must impose strict rules to practise moral teaching
also
.
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