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An increasing number of people want to buy clothes , shoes and other products by famous international brands Why is it ? Do you think it is a positive or a negative development ?

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Now a days
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Nowadays
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 the world is rapidly moving towards modernisation every
individuals
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individual
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 are very much concerned about how presentable they look . From carrying Gucci bags to louis vuitton outfits social media plays an impactful role ,
due to
 which local vendors are being affected,
however
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this
 leads to a negative
develoment
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development
.
Firstly
, buying international
brand
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brands
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now a days
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nowadays
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 is very easy through online portals it is just a click away adding to
this
people
 think that quality of the foreign product is better than the local brand. On top of that influencers are
also
 promoting various brands
as a result
people
belive
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believe
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 those products are luxurious .
Secondly
,
this
 leads to a major downfall for the
home grown
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homegrown
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 brands the quality of their materials are sometimes better than that of the luxury brands but because of the high demand
of
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highend
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high end
high-end
 products the local goods are being
neglacted
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neglected
,
however
this
 results in the economy of the local vendors as
people
this days
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this day
these days
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 prefer purchasing stuff online rather than hopping to local streets.
However
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due to
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the decresing
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decresing
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decreasing
 in footfall in the regional
area
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 it cannot be denied that
this
 affects negatively and the local markets are
also
 closed as most
people
 give
prefrence
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preference
 to foreign clothes rather than the local
one
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ones
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. In conclusion, Imported products have both pros and cons ,
as a
result
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 an individual should use the items in
effective
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an effective
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 manner so that the drawbacks can be controlled
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