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the chart below shows the population of developing and industrialised nations from 1750, with a prediction up to 2050.

the chart below shows the population of developing and industrialised nations from 1750, with a prediction up to 2050.
The
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chart
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 below illustrates the
number
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 of
populations
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 in industrialised countries and in developing countries that start from 1750 with a prediction by 2050.
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, from the chart is observed that the
number
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 of
populations
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are
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 in constant
increase
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, from less than 1
billion
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 in 1750 and is predicted to grow in developing nations
more
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to more
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 than 10
billion
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, and in industrialised countries to 1,5
billion
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. From 1750 to 1950
in
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both nations
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observed a small
increase
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 in population
number
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,
while
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 starting from 1950 the
number
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 of
populations
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 in developing
country
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countries
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 rise significantly and by 2050 is expected a
number
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 of over 10
billion
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of
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people.
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 in
industrialised
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the industrialised
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country
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 the
number
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 of
populations
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 are as well increasing but there
are
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 a
slightly
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increase
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 till 2000, and from 2000 to 2050 the
number
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 of
populations
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 in
this
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 country is predicted to stay steady, without any changes, or with just a small
increase
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 population.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, populations, increase, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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