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Nowadays, the world divided into 2 categories, developed countries and underdeveloped countries.

Nowadays, the world
divided
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 into 2 categories, developed
countries
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 and underdeveloped
countries
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. So there is a moral necessity for the richer
countries
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 to support the poorer
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countries
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develop
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 in terms of increasing the population, education and health care. I totally agree with
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 statement.
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,
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wil
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will
 discuss
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both sides of view. To address
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 argument, the level of gap between
countries
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 will increase in the future. To avoid
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 richer
countries
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 have to help
to
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the poorer nations with basic necessities.
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, the majority of underdeveloped
countries
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 have
the
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food crises and they have
less
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fewer
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 medical facilities.
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, Pakistan
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the
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 food
crises
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, so China which
near
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this
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 country can help them to overcome
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 problem.
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, all
countries
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 can support
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 county.
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 why more developed
countries
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 have to support poorer
countries
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 to avoid the gap and help to overcome the crises. Opposing
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 is the view that every country has their own
responsebilities
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responsibilities
.
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, they can invest the money to construct
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schools and universities. Because it will rise not only
educational
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 rate and
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 the rate of employment.
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,
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 help can overcome the basic problems of poorer nations.
Additionly
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, they can invest
to
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 less developed
countries
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 to create their own system to win the poverty. In conclusion, I want to say that it is great if more developed
countries
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 can help
to
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less developed
countries
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. Because
the
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humanity
shoul
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should
 always be
main
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 cause.
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, it is
responsibility
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the responsibility
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 of
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
 to look after their nations.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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